A critiquer recently called me out on using a gerund when I think they meant to say present participle phrase.
Gerund, is that a word?
Scratching my head, I opened the web browser and googled the word gerund.
Laughing at my ignorance, I found the definition.
A gerund is a verbal that ends in -ing and functions as a noun. The term verbal indicates that a gerund, like the other two kinds of verbals, is based on a verb and therefore expresses action or a state of being. However, since a gerund functions as a noun, it occupies some positions in a sentence that a noun ordinarily would, for example: subject, direct object, subject complement, and object of preposition.
Now, since we are looking at gerunds, we also need to look at participle phrases too, as they are often referred to and pointed out in a critique.
A participle is a verbal that is used as an adjective and most often ends in -ing or -ed. The term verbal indicates that a participle, like the other two kinds of verbals, is based on a verb and therefore expresses action or a state of being. However, since they function as adjectives, participles modify nouns or pronouns. There are two types of participles: present participles and past participles. Present participles end in -ing. Past participles end in -ed, -en, -d, -t, or -n, as in the words asked, eaten, saved, dealt, and seen.
Now, that is more technical than I want to get into at this moment. You can read the both articles at your leisure (and I suggest you do).
What I really want to focus on is how we use or abuse these present participles in our writing.
The worst use of it is, when we try to avoid the I or He/She trap, (I spoke of this in my previous blog). When we are trying to create gaps between our I's and He's or She's, we sometimes like to think that hiding them in the middle of a sentence will work. The problem with this is we tend to overdo it or do it incorrectly.
Notice the sentences used earlier in this post.
Scratching my head, I opened the web browser and googled the word gerund.
Laughing at my ignorance, I found the definition.
You see how they all started with an -ing? I'm using present participle phrases to start the sentence.
For the sentence to be considered, technically correct, all actions would have to happen simultaneously.
Did I really scratch my head and open a web browser and google the word gerund, all at the same time? Probably not. What I did do, is try to hide my "I" in the middle of a jumble of actions (I scratched my head. I opened the web browser. I googled gerund.) beginning with a present participle phrase.
Here is another bad example.
Walking to the door, I turned the knob.
If you are walking to the door, can you really be turning the knob at the same time?
Do you see the problem here? If the actions aren't happening all at the same time, your sentence is wrong. It's fodder for an editors big red pencil.
Now, I'm not saying don't ever start a sentence this way. You can use the -ing beginning if your actions are all happening simultaneously.
Walking to the door, I grabbed my hat and coat.
That last one is ok (not great, just ok) because you could grab your hat and coat on the way to the door.
The simple rule. If you are going to use a present participle phrase to hide an "I" (or a he/she), make sure your actions are able to happen simultaneously.
And, this should go with out saying but I will say it anyway. If you are going to do it, don't over do it. Make this a tool in your arsenal, not a crutch to lean on.
About The Author
Katie Salidas is a USA Today bestselling author and RONE award winner known for her unique genre-blending style.
Since 2010 she's penned five bestselling book series: the Immortalis, Olde Town Pack, Little Werewolf, Chronicles of the Uprising, and the all-new Agents of A.S.S.E.T. series. As her not-so-secret alter ego, Rozlyn Sparks, she is a USA Today bestselling author of romance with a naughty side.
In her spare time Katie also produces and hosts a YouTube talk show; Spilling Ink. She also has a regular column on First Comics News where she explores writing from a nerdy perspective.